Supposed to be doing something else, but I finally have a toehold in Karill’s head and I don’t want to lose it. Switching POVs always messes with my mind. I think I know what else is wrong. Simplify and Intensify. Make it easy to portray and easy to read, make it a more emotional event for Karill, and it will be a more emotional event for the reader.
Luckily, I have a technique for doing the latter…I’ve actually taught it at a couple of cons I’ve gone to. Am going to try what I teach in The Lie of Show Don’t Tell. I’ve used it once before when I was massively stuck. Let’s see where I go with it this time.
So it’s put you money where your mouth it time!