Supposed to be doing something else, but I finally have a toehold in Karill’s head and I don’t want to lose it.  Switching POVs always messes with my mind.  I think I know what else is wrong.  Simplify and Intensify.  Make it easy to portray and easy to read, make it a more emotional event for Karill, and it will be a more emotional event for the reader.

Luckily, I have a technique for doing the latter…I’ve actually taught it at a couple of cons I’ve gone to.  Am going to try what I teach in The Lie of Show Don’t Tell. I’ve used it once before when I was massively stuck.  Let’s see where I go with it this time.

So it’s put you money where your mouth it time!